Ahhh they left her, but it's probably for the best, she wouldn't end up to well I don't think. Hopefully she can make herself feel useful, she must feel so in the way at times.
We just had to have a cliff hanger didn't we?! right when hse was about to tell him! guess I'll have to read on to see what happened and see if my thoughts are correct.
Hmmm so we've got a little more, albeit small, but of her past. Obviously the injury causes her much pain, maybe it leads to her fear of daggers/knives? Hmmm much to wonder about. Ohh and the next battle is coming, what on earth will she do?
Im am glad that you did not make her a wonderful fighter in this battle like I have seen so many do. It is one thing growing up to learn it, but not in a months time. Her wekness was shown and thats a good thing to me. I cannot wait to keep reading.
I must say I an intrigued by the story, it's one of the few girl falls into middle earth I've read but I'm wanting to I've it a shot and so far I like and I like your writing style! Can't wait to read more
So I am interested in why it is she is so afraid of knives, and you mentioned past memories when boromir struck her. Makes me think something happened to her or she saw something in her own world to cause it, guess I have to wait and read more to find out!
Finally!!!! Now kaitlyn just doesn't need to over think it and take Gandalfs advice! I wish your story was not so entrapping as I really need to be studying XD
Oh no!!! She can't die, but seeing how there are more chapters following my fingers are crossed she lives! It's good to see that change in her character. And the man of Rohan is redeeming himself helping her to the caves. Can't wait to finish!
I felt this may have been a little rushed, I don't feel I'm really getting to connect with her. Also she seemed very self assured and confident upon their first meeting, however this could just be her personality. Otherwise though I still like the idea of this story and hope to continue reading
Interesting start, I'll be interested in seeing where this goes. I would suggest though, putting spaces in between paragraphs and when a new character starts speaking, it helps readers follow along.other than that, great start!
A ring can represent practically anything. Undying love, a silent promise, real friendship, commitment, but also nobility, worship or faith. There are rings that symbolize dependence, enslavement, eternity, and apparently there is one that stands for all that’s evil in this world. But let’s not forget a ring is nothing more than a piece of metal that fits nicely around a finger. It doesn’t even have to be pretty.
So don’t ask me why I ended up risking my life, going on this quest to destroy one. I mean, you can’t really blame me for getting caught up in things I don’t even believe in, right?
Be warned: this is a tenth walker fic and English is my second language. It’s possible you’ll hate this story, but don’t forget you’re not legally obliged to do so. And seriously, I really like readers and absolutely love reviewers.
Well I finished it finally, and I'm very sad because I did not want this story to end! I fell in love with the characters and am sad I am having to part with them! For English not to be your primary language I again applaud you for how well it was written, and I hope that you'll have more stories I can read!
Author's Response: Thank you for all your review, Aralinn!I'm glad you didn't like that it was over: that's such a huge compliment :-)! I'm afraid I don't have other stories on offer, other than the rewrite you already know about.
Thanks for your replies to my reviews first off! Hopefully I will get to your new story soon, I have actually gotten very drawn into this story. In this chapter I would watch your terms, iris may use the phrase 'hitting on' but I doubt that anyone from middle earth would. Just a thought. I'm wondering now if Legolas will tell her or not?? And what will she do whe they ride to the black gates?
Author's Response: Thank you for another review! There is absolutely no need to thank me for replying; getting reviews is the absolute best part of writing fanfiction. :) Thanks also for pointing out the somewhat overly modern use of language in this chapter. It's certainly not very Tolkienish. At the same time I can'tfor the life of me see the two men being formal with each other after everything they've been through, and no one sounds old-fashioned when speaking the language of their own time. First I thought about correcting it, but I'm going to go with the easy way out and call it 'lost in translation'. I hope the ending will not be a dissapointment!
I must say I like the change in that she doesn't participate in te battles, it's a fresh new take for me, good job!
Author's Response: Hi Aralinn! Thank you very much for all of your reviews! I'm glad your liking it so far and I think it's great that you kept leaving reviews even when I hadn't responded to earlier ones. I intended to improve the story by rewriting it, but ended up just writing a practically new story based on the same person and ideas. I'm sure the newer version therefore again contains many grammer/spelling mistakes, but I have given a little bit more thought to Iris' line of thought etc. Maybe you would feel a tiny bit more satisfied with how far I go into her feelings there, but I sure wouldn't dare promise anything.
I like that she dropped into ME without just randomly knowing the language. All too often they get dropped in and automatically know common tongue or even elvish!
Well I must say other than a few grammatical errors, there arent any negative things I would point out. I do know you are rewriting this in a different site (I'll read it after XD) but I would like to see more insight into Iris' feelings, I feel we've only touched the surface of them and I really want to feel what she does. And also more in her relations with the fellowship members and her thoughts about where there relationships stand and such, anyways can't wait to keep reading!
Well I haven't been to keen on girl falls into middle story, however I found that I like your writing style and how you portrayed her thoughts and feelings. Even though you did not go into grey depths, it is only the start of the story anyway,I still felt I could really feel her thoughts/feelings and such. And so forth, I think I will give this story a try!
It's already been pointed out about the grammar, so I won't get Into that other than praising you for doing as well as you did writing in a non-native tongue! I would suggest putting in paragraph. Each time a new person talks or the idea changes a new paragraph should be started. It makes it look better, flow better, and easier to read. I think so far though you have a good base for this story and I'd be interested in seeing where it goes!