Nice, though there were a few gramatical mistakes. 'Spoked' is not a word. The proper form is spoke, but 'said' would have fit better in the context.
Hi, Messanie. :D Well, I guess I'll just have to be happy with a draw, right? The lemon was fine, very well done and not sour in the least! Keep writing! Love and peanutbutter ~Melda
Author's Response: Hey!
Thank you very, very much! I am so utterly, one hundred percent relieved that you all seem to like it; I almost didn't post this chapter because I was so nervous about it...
So thanks again! ~ Massanie
You've really improved! Glad to see you back on here again. Hey, do you want to start emailing back and forth again now that the craziness of the school year is done with? I've got time here at the college. :)
Oh, this is so sad! But little Legolas is very cute.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading ; - )
Hi, Tori. :)Nice story so far. Would you perhaps be interested in doing a a co-author thing with me in the near future? I feel like Marie would be at home in TOUFA. :D After all, I am going to be working on a third YGF project.
Author's Response: Wow! I gotta say I am just so honored that you sent me this. I'm sitting in the hospital right now and when I saw this I just lit up like a Christmas tree XD. I would LOVE to co-author with you. Just shoot me an email.
As Jack Sparrow once said "Immitation is the highest form of flattery, love" This sounds really good, I'm happy to know that I helped along your muse to start this and thanks for giving me credit for it.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I feel like it wouldn't be fair if I didn't credit you, and your stories are AMAZING.
This was really good. The emotional crescendo was very fulfilling and yet it left just enough to the imagination to taunt the reader with a pluck of the heartstrings. :) Love and peanutbutter, ~ Melda
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the sweet review, Melda! It's deeply appreciated.
This is a very good start and the detail is quite satisfying. However, my advice would be to space out the paragraphs in a format that is much easier on the eyes. Fanfictions are usually written with a single space in between each paragraph. Oh, and are you looking for a beta? There were very few mistakes (mostly shifting verb tenses, but I thought I saw one misspelled word and a comma error), anyway, I could help if you'd like. On the whole, the story is interesting and I'd like to see what happens.
Dwarves are da bomb. Gimli fangirl right here. Nice to meet you.
Author's Response: Nice to meet another Dwarf lover!