Reviews by L8Bleumr
Summary: A path made clear, and new obstacles to overcome.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Haldir
Genres: Romance, Suspense, Tragedy
Warnings: Graphic Sex
Series: None
Chapters: 36 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 123625 Read Count: 58652
Published: Aug 03 2009 Updated: Jul 22 2011 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Your story is very intriguing and I am caught. Can't wait for more chapters. So many stories get abandoned. Please see this one to its end. This is my first time to give a review. I am new to this fanfic stuff. I'm giving it a try myself though I don't know how well it reads. I'm not a writer and would never claim to be one, just jotting down the stuff in my head. You write beautifully though. Keep it up.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Welcome to the world of fanfiction! lol
Date: Feb 19 2010
Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Good Chpt. Where's the Ghost Whisperer when you need her? lol

Author's Response: lol! yeah, right :D He's actually not a ghost, though, and y'all will find out his true identity soon enough. He stems from an old celtic story, and also from references Tolkien made to... um... OTHER fair folk, but I don't want to spit it out who he is already so I'll shut up :P
Date: Feb 24 2010
Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30 Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Great chapter. You did a nice job with the details of the sod house. I get so excited when I see your updates. I'm still very curious as to what and who might do her harm and where they are going. It is such a mystery.
Date: Oct 16 2010
Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32 Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
I knew she couldn't stay mad at him for long. I have to say, I like these little moments between Sarah and Haldir, a touch, a wink, a look across the room. All these things paint a very clear picture. It's very sweet and sexy. Your Hal is so alluring and irresistable. I'm very curious as to who this spirit is and what happened in their past. And as far as elf pregnancy, from what I've seen I think it's a year. E-gads! Being a mom myself I can tell you, I like your version better (lol). Glad to see the update.

Author's Response: Goodness! I think human women would die after being pregnant for a whole year ;D lol that's intense! Thanks for your review :) You always give really heartfelt ones, it seems :)
Date: Jan 29 2011
Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33 Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
The way you led into the vision was clever. Trouble always leads from eating a forbidden fruit. And here I was getting all excited from their previous conversation about building the fire and *ahem*. It seems like they still have a long way to go yet and she's preggers on top of it all. Thanks for the quick update. Good storytelling.
Date: Jan 31 2011
Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34 Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Nicely written chapter. Hot and sexy yet it shows how deeply in love they are. Haldir is just so beautifully amorous here. You've made him seem so romantic and passionate yet with a tad of lustfulness. I'm loving it.
Date: Feb 04 2011
Summary: A **now complete!** story of Elves, war, hope and love before, during and after the War of the Ring.
A story of Elves, war, hope and love before, during and after the War of the Ring. The story of Daenathal, half elven, embracing her kin and finding love and war…
-- Mostly gap filling, not a 10th walker, hope you will enjoy!

Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse Characters: Galadriel, Haldir, Legolas, Original Character
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 73995 Read Count: 31306
Published: Mar 21 2010 Updated: Mar 28 2011 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 3: Some meetings Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
I am finding you story very interesting. Such mystery surrounding your OC. Liking the jealousy between Legolas and Haldir. A few grammar errors but otherwise a good story. Keep it up.

Author's Response: Thanks L8Bleumr for your support! Unfortunately (hmm it looks obvious that) english is not my mother tongue and I still look for a beta.. I will do my best to get the grammar fixed, thanks :)
Date: Jul 04 2010
Title: Chapter 5: Gold Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Oh my, I think I need a cold shower after that. You make Legolas sound so sexy. I can't stand it. Sorry I haven't reviewed in a while. After reading this chapter, I feel I can't stop.

Author's Response: Thanks my dear! I've been indeed rewriting ALL the chapters for a better flow, adding obviously missing details, and hunting for grammar/spelling mistakes (my d**n english!). Everything is now updated, yay! Thanks for your support, hope you will like the rest :)
Date: Aug 11 2010
Title: Chapter 10: Darkness has come Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
I can see in this chapter that your grammar has improved. I was sad for Legolas and Daenathal that their special day was interrupted by such a horrible attack. I'm guessing they are still betrothed but not bonded, right?

Author's Response: Ah thanks! this brings me much comfort and incentive :) Yep, they are still betrothed but have not bonded.. much darkness lays ahead.. :(
Date: Aug 16 2010
Title: Chapter 13: Deep there Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
I loved, loved, loved this chapter. My favorite part was when Legolas was alone in the armory, pondering his thoughts after arguing with Aragorn. And then, of course, when Legolas whisks Daenathal away back to the armory to confront her and bind to her. You have managed to fill in all the empty spaces quite well. Good job. Keep up with fixing your grammar. It is getting a little better with each chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you so so much! You can't imagine how this warms up my heart! (indeed, I guess you totally can!); It feels particularly good since this is from that chapter that I've been developing (almost) all the rest of the story; This scene is though, in the movies, a big distortion compared to the book; but every time I see the elves showing up, well....
Date: Aug 17 2010
Title: Chapter 19: An unexpected call Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Hey, I've finally caught up. Legolas is acting so suspicious. I don't know if it is just the sea longing or if something else is boiling just below the surface. Can't wait to read more. I must know what happens.

Author's Response: ahah, yes, some things are about to come... I try to update soon. Thanks! :)
Date: Aug 20 2010
Title: Chapter 20: Some partings Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
It seems I am not the only one who leaves readers wanting more. Legolas is acting strange indeed and it can't be good. What is going on in that lovely head of his?

Author's Response: You'll see, you'll see ;) have my own evil ways too, hehe :) and thanks for your extra update btw!!
Date: Aug 22 2010
Title: Chapter 21: Ithilien Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
This was a wonderful chapter. You managed to show the joy and rebirth of all the devastated areas. But you also kept an uncertainty between Legolas and Daenathal. I want to be happy for them but with the underlying shadow, I also fear what it to come. How will they deal with their future I wonder? I will hold out hope.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Your words just make my day, you can't imagine my joy :) Yes, no love without grief, no happiness without shadow; I cannot prevent myself of lingering in what I like to call Tolkien's sad romance. All good things come with a price, and Middle-Earth is, to my understanding, not deprived of this. I do my best to post soon! Thanks again my friend, you feedback is always very dear to me
Date: Aug 24 2010
Title: Chapter 22: Edhellond Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Oh I could feel their pain. There must be something more than sea longing to make Legolas react in such a way. I loved how you told the story of Nimrodel. Your tale is unraveling nicely. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks mellon nín!! Your support is most welcome Sorry for the delay in responding... I try to update soon!
Date: Sep 02 2010
Title: Chapter 23: Loosing tracks Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Well, as much as I hate to see these two seperate, I am glad she is going to the Galadriel. Perhaps she can get some answers. Legolas better figure out what's wrong with him also. Happy they had such a sweet and loving night together but it's sad to see her leave in the end. Nice chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks my friend! Sorry again for the long delay for answering your ever kind review I hope to be able to post more soon Thanks for your support!
Date: Oct 05 2010
Title: Chapter 24: Home Sweet Home Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
My favorite lines here are... "He is a warden I presume." "He is a Noldo." I love the lightheartednesss between Daenathal and the brothers, especially Rumil. About Tylno... not sure what's up with him, but I think he could definitely shed some light for Dae with his stories of old. My heart goes out to Dae though. She is hoping Legolas will follow her but so far he has not. Come on Legolas. Get up off that tight little tush and get to Lorien. *slaps him on his rear*. I must be honest and say it's been a while since reading your story. I took a crash course and went back to skim over a few chapters. It didn't take me long to remember though. Your knowlege of the different elf races shines through (something I am about to embark on thanks to a much loved friend of mine). And a big thank you and you are welcome melon nin. I will always be your supporter no matter how long it takes you to finish this tale or start new ones. You are a much improved author since I first started reading and you will only get better, of that I am sure. ***Moe***

Author's Response: Thanks Moe, I'm happy you're still enjoying the story :) Indeed, Leg needs a good slap, and Dae as well; it is convenient to give in an easy strategy and preserve oneself... well I won't say more on the topic. And Tylno, ah! it's a long time I wanted to write about the Noldors; he is a peculiar character.. I think the Noldor might be the most interesting race among the Eldar. I see that in your current story, you dig in also in this issues and I'm glad 'cause I really like this debate; Tolkien spent a long time (all his life actually!) working on this... so there is a great field for inspiration there :) Thanks for your kind support, sincerely it means a lot, and it always boosts up my mood :)))
Date: Jan 04 2011
Title: Chapter 25: To be an Elf Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
I knew I didn't like that Tylno guy. What a creep. So glad Haldir was there to put an end to it, though something tells me Tylno isn't completely gone. I love your Haldir by the way. And now I'm jumping up and down like some crazed fangirl *embarassing I know*. Legolas is here. I can't wait to see what happens now. I want to know why he's taken so long. Geez, it took Galadriel and Elrond leaving to get him out of Mirkwood. Great chapter and so good to see you post again melon nin.

Author's Response: Thanks my friend. I particularly enjoyed marking the Tylno character with heavy personality features. I imagine the Noldor being strong, bold and proud, almost extreme in all their qualities and drawbacks. And yes, I love Haldir too. I can definitely see him cold yet goodhearted and generous. I think that I had a hard time detaching from "your Haldir" in " What Path" and "Gardian" :) Well, yes, I'm back on posting, It is almost the end and I know that I succeed to finish this also thanks to your support :)
Date: Jan 25 2011
Title: Chapter 26: Lórien wine Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
I feel a rush of relief washing over me after reading this chapter. A very sweet moment for their first meeting. Of course, I'm sure it will take some time for them to come back together. I'm just so glad Legolas finally understands what has been ailing him and that he can deal with the sea longing now. And I just wanted to say what a great compliment it is that you based your Hal on mine. I think both of us just can't help but to see him like this, stiff as stone but caring when he needs to be. It's what makes him so sexy. lol

Author's Response: Sorry for answering so late... thanks my friend! It takes me forever to finish this story (working here like a crazy woman, no time to read/write :( unfair), so your support and reviews are always a blessing to me. Yes, it feels that the end is eventually coming soon, things are slowly getting into place. It sometimes takes a lot of efforts to pinpoint what can turn wrong and, in the other hand, to be aware of the good things. Any choice, even the smallest, is able to change your life forever! just hope we all make the good ones ;)
Date: Jan 30 2011
Title: Chapter 28: Epilogue Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Congratulations on the completion of your story. I know you've worked a long time on it. Wonderful imagery of Legolas and Dae as they reconcile, and as she is allowed to sail with him in the end. I always love a happy ending.

Author's Response: Thanks Moe! yes, it took me a year to wrap it up. Thanks again for your support all along, it means a lot to me. I need to spare some more time for reading, I saw that you finished Taming the Wild and started a new one, dear, you're so prolific! I must catch up quickly :) Cheers!
Date: Mar 28 2011
Summary: He was EomerKing, a pig-headed, hot tempered SOB with a kind and compassionate heart that belied his gruff, taciturn exterior. She was a beautiful girl, marked by the Valar, with a mysterious past and seemingly no future, sent to kill him. Follow Eomer, King of the Riddermark, Loti, the lost Princess of Dol Amroth and an entire cast of old and new characters in a journey of intrigue, corruption, conspiracy, comedy, mystery, murder, romance, pirates, spies, lies and unpredictable adventure as they attempt to uncover a new and dangerous threat to the precarious and strained peace settled over Middle earth. Who knows what might happen along the way... An unusual Eomer/Lothiriel romance
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Elfhelm, Elfwine, Eomer, Eomund, Eowyn, Faramir, Imrahil, Lothiriel, Original Character, Théodred, Théodwyn
Genres: Drama, Erotica, Family, Fantasy, Humor, Hurt/Comfort, Mystery, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 294302 Read Count: 29188
Published: Apr 24 2010 Updated: Feb 13 2013 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 Into the Lion's Den Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
It took me a couple days, but well worth it after reading your latest. Honestly, I forgot we were in Middle-earth. I forgot that Eomer was canon and felt like I was reading an original novel. Your whole set up of Harad, Gondor, Rohan and all its people is amazing. You could easily switch out these places with real world ones and not skip a beat here. I know it's long and you apologize, but you shouldn't. Every paragraph I finish has me wanting to read the next one. The tension between E, Izz and his sons was great. And the after dinner talk, loved it. Loti just blended in so smoothly with those chatty women and she even had the last laugh. Your descriptions are something I still need to learn to do. You add it in all the time and it draws such a clear picture. For example, when Eomer took Loti's hand and you said 'like a bird in a lion's mouth.' I love that kind of added detail. You just drop it in quickly and then keep going. I have read some stories that go on and on to the point that I forget what they are trying to explain in the first place. I read something about a couple making love once that turned into gardening 101 and I forgot what the point was to begin with. You are a pro at sticking in these little snippets, though. It's done just right and doesn't take away from the original thought. Now, the part where Eomer is playing the part to give them an excuse to go upstairs made the hair on the back of my neck stand up. All that closeness and whispering, warm breath on skin... gave me goosebumps. Not to mention the scene in the office on the couch as the guard came in. Wow, sure didn't want that to stop, as I'm sure E felt the same way. He is as manly as they come and I just can't get enough of him. Loved the bantering back and forth as they searched the office too. Nice way to combine the two situations, looking for evidence while questioning him about the maid. Jealous anyone? I know I would be. Also wanted to mention what a great job you're doing with the plot outside of E and Loti. The letters in code was genius and the fact that Loti figures it out shows how well she and E work together. She's the smarts and he's the brawn. They really do make a great couple, even if they aren't ready for that yet. I could go on and on but there's too much to mention. As always, very worth the wait to read. You are hands down my favorite het writer and I learn so much from your work. Now if you'll excuse me, I need to wipe my chin and stop drooling over these visions of Eomer on that couch.

Author's Response: Wow! Possibly my longest review ever! Thanks for that! Seriously, this chapter should have been twice as big, but I decided just to post what I had written after the whole ER thing. I just started to write again today. My head just wasn't in the game until today. I can't really help the length of these things! Once these two get going, they just get out of control. This was a really important chapter, that's why it took so long to post, too. It had to be carefully formulated. I think it is possible to learn how to write good descriptions, but it takes alot of work. Reading everything you can get your hands on is probably the best way to learn how; seeing how different people write things differently. I think the descriptions in Journey of a Butterfly are really good. Metaphors are an interesting way of describing things, but you have to be careful with them. Gardening and sex?... Other than sowing of seeds and plowing of furrows...I don't see it. Oh, and the goat milking/sex metaphor... always bad. The whole coded letters thing I can't take credit for and the part where Loti tells E to look for someting that looks out of place... I saw a show about spys on the military channel once and those were two examples of techniques spies use to hide things or information. Then come to find out, Diana Gabaldon uses coded letters in Dragonfly in Amber, so I knew I had something then! I guess if I made you feel something, then I did my job! I'm flattered by your compliments and that you would actually take the time to read anything that I wrote! When I started writing this, I had no idea how electric E and L would be together. What one lacks the other compensates for. Unlike a lot of romances, where the romance is the plot, the plot of this story is directly related to the romance. I always enjoy reading your reviews! Thanks for taking to the time to not only read my stuff but review it also!
Date: Sep 20 2011
Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 Midnight in the Garden of Evil Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Eomer has gone through a lot of self-examining here it seems. Having to leave Loti behind with Izz really forced him to look at things differently. I could really feel the push and pull of his struggle. He is still unsure as to whether there is something between them or if she is maintaining her spy status. And then when he finally get to her and finds her in a compromising position, his rage is overwhelming. I love how he seems lost to this power. I would think it would be a frightening thing to witness. Here’s what I wonder though. Did Loti expect him to come for her? Did she have similar questions about E while she was biding her time with Izz? This whole thing was really a test of faith in each other. Still, they are both very stubborn aren’t they?

Now as for my most favorite part of this, it is hand’s down Eothain. What a beautiful and raw version of a Rohirric man’s idea of love with one woman and starting a family too. This was true poetry while keeping within the lines of how one of these rough and tough men would put it. E needed to hear this. He needs to know that loving one woman will only make him stronger. Now he just needs to figure out that it is Loti that will fill him up with what is missing.

And I’m so glad to see E kiss her like he did. The moment was right. That was a very big step for them, though it was in between all the bantering. I think they are ready to let go a little by now and I don’t mean everything all at once. I like the slow development between them, but I’m ready to see more acceptance towards one another. But no matter what, E will always have that air of ‘pig’ about him. I love that and it’s such a guy thing. For example, how he’s pissed off at Loti when he finds her naked with the chieftain, but then takes some young girl in a stairwell. Makes me want to slap the sh*t out of him and then throw him to the ground and have my way with him, lol.

This was your longest chapter yet and it took me the weekend plus a couple days to get through. It needs more than just one review, it seems. There’s always something I forgot to point out, but just know that you did an excellent job as always and it’s well worth every minute spent reading.

Oh and btw, it seems you posted chp 18 twice. Just thought you'd like to know.

Author's Response: Yes, I did want to know! Thanks for that. And thanks for such a big review! I appreciate everyone who reads my loooong chapters. I know it's asking alot. This was the first time I'd ever written a misunderstanding, and it's hard! That was the most difficult portion of the chapter to write and I don't really think it came out very good, but what the hell... this is practice right? I struggled with these same questions that you ask... No. I don't thinks she expected or wanted E to rescue her. She knows she can take care of herself, it's E that has trouble with that. He, Eomer, thinks, as all good men do, that it's his job to protect her. Through all the doubts I had writing this chapter, I knew E was coming back for her. Period. It's just who he is. Eomer, act before thinking? Never!lol And the whole girl in the stairwell thing...that's just E being E. I've learned not to censor him. Every character has his story, and Eothain has his and it's not necassarily a happy one. Eowyn will tell it later. Eothain is genuinely a good guy and Eomer thinks very highly of him and his opinions. I've thought long and hard about Eomer, his personality tendancies and why he does what he does. A man who's blatantly reckless is impulsive, doesn't think before hand about consequences, is probably fatalistic, possibly thinks himself immune to death or injury(why young men are always front line soldiers). Later, he probably realizes his stupidity and has regrets. I know Eomer does. It's very hard to keep E and L out of bed. They are like magnet and iron and I have difficulty reigning in their desires because I want their sex to be...special. If I didn't reign them in alittle, he'd have had her on her back a dozen times already and neither one of them could deal with both their burgeoning romance and the stress of this tenuous political situation. Are they in love right now? No. Do they care about each other have great respect for each other's abilites and talents? Yes. And love is born out of equal parts affection and respect. One more short chapter and then they will go to Minas Tirith... and we'll see what happens there...
Date: Jan 17 2012
Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 Rub A Dub Dub Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Hi duchess. Didn't want you to think I forgot about you. I'm on vacation and just now got a chance to finish reading your latest. There are so many things I loved about this, so many little clever lines that I can't mention them all. I liked that this whole chpt. was for Eomer and Loti. I know they are such a long way off from being together, but I feel like they are a step closer. At times they are so distant and then they bicker like an old married couple. And oh what a site it mist be to see him naked. Another perfectly charming, sexy and entertaining chapter. I'm always so glad to see your posts.

Author's Response: Well, that was sweet of you! I'm flattered you'd take time out of your vacation to read my drivel. I'm glad you like it because despite what I thought, it was a hard chapter to write. E/L have such a strange dynamic. Sometimes brother sister, sometimes like wayward lovers, sometimes like old married people, sometimes like business partners. It's probably not the most exciting chapter as far as action goes, but I hope it futhers the love storyline. I tried to make fun of myself a little bit too! Oh, if you could only see what he looks like inside my head...Thanks again for reading. I always appreciate it!
Date: Jul 10 2011
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Hi Duchess. I have just started reading this and I'm only on the second chpt. But I just had to say that I am completely enthralled with this story. What an awful life she has had thus far. Already I'm yearning for Eomer to come and sweep her off her feet. I'm sure it won't be that simple though and look forward to reading more. Great writing. Very descriptive and poetic rhythm. I've got some catching up to do but just wanted to let you know what a great job you are doing and that I am hooked. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Author's Response: Thanks for the nice words and review! I have a tendacy to be verbose, but hopefully that makes it seem more realistic.
Date: Nov 05 2010
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Loved the exchange between them as she hid ready to fire her bow. Laughed when she told him he hit like a girl. I feel her pain and her frightfulness for what might happen to her. Loti is one of the strongest leading ladies I have read. Love that about her. Eomer will definitely be her match in that way. Great chemistry already.
Date: Nov 08 2010
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
This chapter was one of the hottest I've read in a while. The sexual tension between these two makes the pulse race. Love the bits of humor thrown into the mix as they spit insults back and forth. And then you bring us back to despair as Loti remembers her family and her how she ended up where she is now. You are truly talented and are going into my favorites category. I just can't say enough. Thanks for this.

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks for such a nice and well thought out review! It is appreciated. I think the first few chapters could be rewritten at some point. But, I think only with perspective do you realize that things could be presented better. It took me a few chapters to really understand these two.
Date: Nov 12 2010