Very nicely done. I still maintain that was the best "girl falls into Middle-earth" moment in history, though. ;) You created some very real emotions, and managed to make them realistic in two vastly different ages. Faye's journey from monster to not-monster was well handled and very realistic--not to mention quite a bit of fun to read. The descriptions throughout were nicely detailed and very vivid as well, which added another element to the story's impressiveness. Nice job.
Heh heh, nope, not the end of Faye after all...nicely done. Seeing it through Mur's eyes and then only arriving to find the aftermath adds a nice element of--well, not really mystery, but something akin to that. Poor little Arwen, getting snapped at; Elrond's just frightened and worried, but she's too young to know that...methinks a conversation or two will be needed to heal that.
Very nice, you have a great sense of description. It makes Imladris very beautiful. I like the shifts in perspective between Arwen and Faye. You capture both of them very well and seem to have no problem shifting between a well-done childish viewpoint and a far older one. Only one problem this chapter: I cringe whenever I see the word "okay" in a LoTR fic, although at least it was the elflings using it so it's not as bad. That's just a personal pet peeve, though, and I'm probably being too nitpicky. Anyway, I can't wait to see what you concoct with Faye and little Arwen next.
That has got to be the best "girl falls into Middle-earth" bit I have ever read. Spectacular! Good level of detail, too; nicely written. But oh, I am just so humerously overcome by that...heh... "Mary Sue the Vampire"--okay, I'm done now...
Interesting idea but it is not very Middle-Earth friendly. It might be better if you gave it an AU warning.
Everything seems fine with the grammar and spelling. Arwen seems to be speaking in a modern lingo, however. Modernisms like "wow" are a little bit jarring in your story. Everything else seems fine though!