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Title: A Vampire's Soul //Chapter eight// Reviewer: Princess Kalen Signed
Date: 02/03/06 - 06:17 pm [Report This]
Title: A Vampire's soul //Chapter one// Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Hey, your friendly neighbourhood moderator here. Your first chapter title has a little typo "Vapire" instead of Vampire. Might want to fix that. Also, quotes are like this: "Hi," he said. You use comma when a quote is followed by "he said/she said/she murmured" etc. You also overdo a bit on the commas. Either way, good luck with the rest of the story! (And don't hurt poor Will too much, eh?)

Author's Response: soory about the typo, I was in a hurry at that time... and I know that with the comma, it's something that sneaks in from the german grammer which is my first language... I try my best to correct it... oh, and he won't be hurt much more, Physically at least...
Date: 05/11/04 - 05:04 pm [Report This]
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