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Reviewer: Scribetothehighking Signed [Report This]
Date: 17/10/08 - 03:19 pm Title: Epilogue

YOU WROTE SOMETHING BEAUTIFUL!!!!

Author's Response: Hannon lle! Glad you enjoyed it! :-)

Reviewer: lij_is_my_lover Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/01/06 - 08:19 pm Title: Chapter Twenty-seven

This chapter would have to be my favourite out of them all. So touching and pleasent. You have a lovely writing teqniche. x

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Very glad you're enjoying Frodo's soujourn in Valinor... :-)

Reviewer: Sarah Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 11/10/05 - 03:14 pm Title: Epilogue

Hey its me. How it going? I was just wondering if I could borrow your Cara character to use in one of my fan fics? I couldn't find her on the list so I assumed she was yours. Thanks x Sarah xxx

Reviewer: Sarah Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 04/10/05 - 05:51 pm Title: Chapter One

Hey its me. How it going? I was just wondering if I could borrow your Cara character to use in one of my fan fics? I couldn't find her on the list so I assumed she was yours. Thanks x Sarah xxx

Reviewer: Sarah Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 17/09/05 - 09:18 am Title: Epilogue

ABSOLUTLY BRILLIANT! CHECK OUT MINES STORIES SOMETIME. SARAH XX

Author's Response: Hannon lle, Sarah! I'll be sure to read yours too! Aibre├âĂĺ├é┬ín

Reviewer: Inwe_Elessar Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/02/05 - 04:14 am Title: Chapter Two

I'ts me again. Wonderful chapter!

Author's Response: Inwe_Elessar, hannon lle! Glad I could ease your concern over your mother ;-) Hope you keep reading!

Reviewer: Inwe_Elessar Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/02/05 - 03:48 am Title: Chapter One

Brilliant! P.S. Good to know that my mother is getting better!

Reviewer: Adoralyna Signed [Report This]
Date: 22/11/04 - 09:54 am Title: Chapter Four

Your writing style is lovely! I look forward to reading more.

Author's Response: Adoralyna, Thank you! Sorry I couldn't respond right away. I hope you continue to enjoy reading my tale of Frodo & Cara... :-)

Reviewer: Novedhelion Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/11/04 - 07:56 pm Title: Chapter Three

Oops...that double posted. Sorry 'bout that, Aibrean. But you get my point. Nove

Reviewer: Novedhelion Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/11/04 - 07:54 pm Title: Chapter Three

For what it's worth, I think this is a delightful little story...it's sweet, and it's nice to think that something GOOD actually happened to poor Frodo in Valinor. Stop being so darn nitpicky over details and just ENJOY the work for what it is - a nice piece of hobbit/elf fluff. I mean, really, if people can write slash, why can't Frodo fall for an Elf maiden? Sheesh...that's why it's called FICTION. Keep on keeping on, Aibrean...

Reviewer: Novedhelion Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/11/04 - 07:54 pm Title: Chapter Three

For what it's worth, I think this is a delightful little story...it's sweet, and it's nice to think that something GOOD actually happened to poor Frodo in Valinor. Stop being so darn nitpicky over details and just ENJOY the work for what it is - a nice piece of hobbit/elf fluff. I mean, really, if people can write slash, why can't Frodo fall for an Elf maiden? Sheesh...that's why it's called FICTION. Keep on keeping on, Aibrean...

Reviewer: Noldo Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/11/04 - 01:13 pm Title: Chapter Two

There's no Elvish word for 'yes' - 'I agree' translates to 'Gerin be nau'.

I find the story quite interesting, though you'll have to forgive my winces over 'Carantaliel' and 'Figwit'.

Reviewer: Noldo Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/11/04 - 01:08 pm Title: Chapter One

The idea definitely has potential, however there are a few things I'd like to point out:

1. Red hair is almost non-existent among Elves (the only ones who had it were Nerdanel and three of her sons), and since nobody related to Galadriel, Celeborn or Elrond had it, genetics say that (unless her mother is a Feanorian, which is unlikely) Elladan's daughter can't have red hair.

2. What is Carantaliel supposed to mean? The nearest I can make of it is 'red-foot-maiden', which is patently unlikely for an Elf, I think.

3. 'Figwit' - I know he's quite a fan phenomenon; however, the name isn't Elvish. At all. Why not try to construct a Sindarin name for him - or check out this website.

4. 'Enedvasa' sounds like a combination of the Sindarin 'enedh' - center or middle - and the ancient Quenya 'vasa' - the Sun. If you want the name to mean 'Palace by the Sea', might I suggest 'Bar-en-Aear' (literal: Home of Sea, which is the closest I can make).

5. 'She rivals even Queen Arwen and The Lady herself'
This is very unlikely. Arwen is in the image of Luthien - the most beautiful Elven maiden. Ever.
B'sides, Galadriel has had her share of mad, lovestruck suitors: Feanor (to an extent), Celebrimbor, Celeborn. I'd say she was something out of the ordinary, certainly.

6. 'Mellonmin' is wrong! If you're in Sindarin (I'm assuming this), it's 'mellon nin', or if you want to be specific, 'meldir' or 'meldis' can be substituted for 'mellon' - meldir is masculine, meldis is feminine.

7. A Hobbit-Elf romance (it seems to be implied) is wrong on many levels.

I don't mean to be discouraging. Your grammar is quite good, and I'm wondering how this story is going to turn out.

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