Pretty much all I can say is wow. This story left me speechless. The angst is flawless because it flows so freely, and your declared lack of premeditation would definitely be one of the reasons for this.
I especially liked this line in particular- "The youngsters, who clung to their mothers and fathers, who breathed their last without knowing why." You captured the very essence of war here.
I also very much loved the ending- I take this to be Legolas preventing Aragorn from committing suicide. In this, you did an excellent job of showing their friendship rather than telling about it.
A beautiful piece of work, in all!
Author's Response: Wow, such kind words. Thank yo so much. I had been a young, free soul back then, it seems. ;) I shall strive to regain that freedom and continue to work hard to improve - thank you!
Oooo. This is great! I don’t think you should polish it, either, it’s incredible the way it is. I think you did a very good job with exploring the thoughts that would go through Aragorn’s mind after fighting in so many battles, and ending so many lives. This may be “raw”, but it is powerful and deep with emotion. Excellent job with portraying Legolas and I love that description of his eyes. I also like your portrayal of Legolas’ relationship with Aragorn (I so want in on that hug). Overall, absolutely beautiful. *Clapping*
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you!! It's been long since I wrote that piece and it embarrasses me to read it, but am I glad to hear you enjoyed it so! ;)
I liked it. I thought the raw, "unpolished" nature was a good idea. Excellent handling on emotions on both parts; seeing Aragorn lost like this doesn't happen often, and I think you did a good job of it. Very emotional!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I am so happy to hear what you thought of the story!