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Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/06/11 - 08:56 am Title: Chapter 3 Melkor's Bait

"And to see and hear those wondrous things come from the mind of Manwe made the other Ainur feel as though they came from Eru himself..." - most awesome discription I've read of Manwe!

I am loving your vision of life for these spirits before time. It's breathtaking! And witnessing Melkor's spiral into Evil is too cool... I like detail that he could not yet lie! And his Bait, nice devious work. I was excited to see young Ungoliant. Will we get to see Sauron, perhaps...?

Keep it up! :)

Author's Response: Thanks Kitt! And yes, I do plan to write something about Melkor's initial encounter with Sauron. I'll keep you posted about it! :)

Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed [Report This]
Date: 24/05/11 - 01:00 am Title: Chapter 2 Down Into the Void

This is fascinating! And courageous too - to explore the motives of Melkor! You get into his head very well and your description of Nothingness vs Being within his brethren's thoughts is awesome. :) The Silm-esque writing style is fitting too. Thanks for sharing this!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked this. I actually made it in a hurry! I'll come up with the next chapter soon.

Reviewer: EldarinPrincess Signed [Report This]
Date: 20/05/11 - 03:12 am Title: Chapter 1 The Lure of the Void

I love how you describe Melkor's thoughts. This was a wonderfully written chapter. I enjoyed it immensely.

Reviewer: Caunedhiel Signed [Report This]
Date: 17/05/11 - 05:11 pm Title: Chapter 1 The Lure of the Void

I like this. It's very tolkienesque (if that's even a word) in the way its written. And its nice that characters that don't get as much attentions as others are being explored

Please update soon!! :)

Author's Response: Thanks Caunedhiel! This is actually my first attempt to write. I'll try to update as soon as I can!

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