Your story is going forward nicely, but I'm sorry to say that the spelling (which mostly is perfectly fine) distracts me at least. If you don't have a beta (= a proof reader) yet and want one, I could volunteer. If you're interested at all, e-mail me to email@example.com and we'll discuss some more.
Whatever you decide about that, keep on writing the story and I'll keep on reading it ;)
Yes, very much continue. Everyone has spelling or grammar problems. I do. And I am certain many others even if they are experienced have had a time or two when that one misspelled word got away. Sometimes on this site, there are people here who are willing to beta for you. Just tell them what you need and what you want. That is if you choose to. I can't live without mine. LOL! Good luck and good start.
Author's Response: Thanks. I was wondering what a "beta" was, now I know.