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Title: Chapter 1: Attacked in the Dark Reviewer: Narya Signed
Nice job; your writing's improving all the time, and Braun engages the reader's sympathy successfully.

Nitpick: when Merry, Pippin and Sam follow Strider and Frodo up the stairs, I think you need a more dramatic word than "walk" to describe their entrance into the room. "Sprint," maybe, or "hurtle." You wouldn't just "walk" if your friend's life was in danger!

I like it though; I think this is an interesting and original idea. On to the next chapter!
Date: 18/02/09 - 05:28 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Attacked in the Dark Reviewer: Shadow Maiden Signed
Keep going! This is great,

Author's Response: Glad you are liking this Dae, I will keep it up! Dune
Date: 13/02/09 - 06:53 am [Report This]
Title: Prologue Reviewer: Shadow Maiden Signed
I am hooked! Awesome! Intrigue, susprense, you got it! Keep going, I know I'll keep reading:))
Date: 13/02/09 - 06:48 am [Report This]
Title: Prologue Reviewer: Narya Signed
Intriguing stuff, Dune - I like your idea. You've built up the suspense well in this opening, and you write really clearly. The only thing I'd suggest would be inserting a double line space between each paragraph; it'll make it easier on the eye.

Take care - Narya

Author's Response: Thanks for the tip, I will get right on that! Glad you read and liked this story! Dune
Date: 12/02/09 - 12:33 pm [Report This]
Title: Prologue Reviewer: meerkatalex Signed
I have absolutely no idea... Wait, Aragorn didn't summon him for help, did he? I think he's headed for Bree, but it sounds unlikely if they don't let Minotaurs in... I'm a little puzzled as to where and why they are travelling to such place... Good luck in your writing, sounds good so far! :-)


Author's Response: Thank you for the review! No Aragorn did not summon Braun or his companions and no they are not headed to bree for they had just past it. It was one of them that the Gatekeeper had seen, that's why he said it looked like a Minotaur because he could quite make them out with the cloaks and all. I will see if I can come up with the next chapter soon! Dune
Date: 12/02/09 - 12:30 pm [Report This]
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