Good start! You built up the tension really well when they were near the enemy, and their camaraderie when they realised what had happened was poignantly written. One thing - I think you meant "murmur" not "mummer" when Gandalf's casting his spell, and (sorry) I find it a bit too convenient that he can suddenly bestow all the skills they need upon them; I think it'd be more interesting to watch them learn tracking, archery etc. without supernatural interference. But maybe that's just me.
Other than that, nice work - your writing gets better all the time.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I am glad you liked it, please keep reading! Dune
"while Mac cracked his knuckles." - I thought that was kinda funny, really. *claps hands excidedly* A fist fight in the Council! Yeah! Oh, why'd they have to hold Tom back... *pouts*
13 companions! Sounds a little unlucky. Perhaps they could use Bilbo to be the Lucky Number again! Ok, so that may not work... :D
Author's Response: I am not that suspicious so thirteen companions is ok with me! Glad you liked this chapter! Dune
If you want to include more about the landscape your characters are traveling through, I suggest you acquire "The Atlas of Middle Earth" by Karen Fonstad. It's available at a good price from Amazon.com
Author's Response: Thank you for the suggestion, but I am hard on money right now, so, I am sorry! Thanks for the review though! Dune
Hehe, Arwen's fiesty!
I like that: it's not Glorfindel, nor Arwen, it's Tom (and let's not forget Nightshade) who make the flight to Rivendell.
I hope there's no lasting damage to Josh, like, uh Morgul bruises. Seriously, I was very happy to see him up. *grinning*
Hopefully Tom can take it easy now... oh *choking back yawn* he's making me tired, though. : )
Author's Response: Well I would imagine chasing horses for many miles, you would be tired to! And also not to mention that, not getting a wink of sleep in 10 hours, I mean he would have fallen off of the horse sooner or latter! Thanks for the review! Dune
Very exciting. It's too bad the former cavalrymen couldn't have brought their heavy revolvers with them.
Author's Response: Well, I don't know how the people of ME would have reacted to the strange weapons. I am glad you like my stories, thanks for the review! Dune
I don’t mind being nagged! : ) I hope to have more fanfiction time this weekend but I must finish homework I’ve, uh, been neglecting.
Hey, cool bio picture! Did you draw it? It took me months to figure out how to get my picture up… (hmm, and we’re supposed to be the Digital Generation.)
Surprising revelation about Henry and Josh! That’s like when ‘Lawrence’ scolded Tom for, you know, calling him Lawrence. Very wise: you shouldn’t be choosing favorites in a group of men, all ready to die for you.
Now splitting up is a good idea. I thought they might be a little conspicuous all together.
“Merry and Pippin both nodded as if they understood” – *laughs* Even I get confused, between Scots and Irish I mean. You’ve got the accent down. I can almost do it… but it doesn’t come easy.
I like to see them all with distinct personalities, even the horses. Their bantering is fun. But of all of them I especially adore quiet Mac. His song was… beyond moving.
*squeaks* Well, shooting an arrow at them IS one way to get their attentions. *whispers aside* Boys…
Worried about Josh. Being thrown into a rock by a Wraith is not, to say the least, healthy.
Author's Response: Well my roommate has a Scotch-Irish heritage, so he was my inspiration for Mac. I didn't realize that I was making a "Lawrence" example, I should have known that. Glad you liked this chapter. Can't wait for your next chapter! Dune
Inspiration seems to be treating you well!
I do love the calvary, in part because I have a softspot for JEB… though I admit, I really don’t know much about the Union calvary.
Liked their different reactions to nervousness.
Oooh. Owe. Painful way to die. It *looks* worse than being shot, but I assume it’s quicker than wasting away from a bullet wound.
Seriously, you are getting better and better with your descriptions. And YES, you know how to write something touching, I admire that a lot! That was a tough thing to break to them, that they’ll never see their families again.
I'm about done with the first chapter for your challenge... but I must warn you again, it's ridiculous. : )
Author's Response: I am glad you like this new story. And I still can't wait to read your story! chapter two is up as well for Riders of Arnor! D.R.O.T.N.