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Reviewer: oelberethgilthoniel Signed [Report This]
Date: 30/01/08 - 01:30 pm Title: October Night: A Soldier's Nighttime Reverie

Wow!!
I love your rhyming scheme!
This is an awesome poem!
**Adds to favorites

OEG

Author's Response: Thanks, OEG. I actually wrote it about 38 years ago when I was in Vietnam. Only recently did I think of adapting it as the work of a fledgling ranger in camp near the shores of the River Anduin.

Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed [Report This]
Date: 13/01/08 - 02:08 am Title: October Night: A Soldier's Nighttime Reverie

A response to Ria's review:

Orion is :
Menelvagor
Menelmacar
Telumehtar

It just depends on what language you are using when referencing the constellation.

Also, I think that it would be rather hard to find Elvish equivalents of our major constellations that fit into the rhyming, so I disregarded that part of the poem.

Happy reading!
SMEE

Author's Response: Actually, I thought about using Elvish equivalents to some of the constellations, but then I realized that Pocosin would be writing this in Westron, which would appear as English to us.

Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed [Report This]
Date: 13/01/08 - 02:05 am Title: October Night: A Soldier's Nighttime Reverie

That's pretty good!

Usually, I find the obvious rhyming distracting and detracting, but this time, it nicely complements the idea of the poem.

NZ

Author's Response: At the time I wrote it, the rhyming seemed a bit self-conscious, but then I don't consider myself a professional poet. Nevertheless, the poem has already been published in a major newspaper and a local magazine, so it can't be that bad.

Reviewer: Ria Signed [Report This]
Date: 13/01/08 - 12:09 am Title: October Night: A Soldier's Nighttime Reverie

Great topic for a poem! I love your use of color. Isn't Orion called Menelvagor in Tolkien?

Author's Response: Thanks, Ria. In Middle Earth tradition, Menelvagor was placed in the sky by Elbereth as one of the guardians against the exiled Melkor. In The Silmarillion he is referred to as Menelmacar, which is Quenya for 'Heaven-Swordsman.' Betelgeuse, the bright star on Orion's shoulder, was known to the Elves as 'Borgil' (Ever-Star).

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