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Reviewer: Elbereth Signed [Report This]
Date: 15/02/12 - 10:04 pm Title: Chapter 1

I like that a lot. :D It is, as others have said, very Elvish.

Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/07/10 - 03:23 pm Title: Chapter 1

Very good.
Well written, and elvish sounding.
The exclamation points add to it very well, and it is short, yet very well written.
Well done! =)

Reviewer: meerkatalex Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/02/09 - 07:24 pm Title: Chapter 1

This sounds like something very much that the Elves would sing, or maybe an Elvish-like Hobbit! ((Anyone we know? Teehee.)) Anyway this is a very good poem - I won't point out the spelling mistakes as some authors have done that already, all I have to say is one word - graceful. Oh, and flowing, And Elvish. Oh, that's three. Never mind. Well done!

meerkatalex

Author's Response: I had Lothlorien in mind while writing this, so maybe Celeborn, Galadriel, or Haldir. Of course, it could be Merry, too, but I rather think it was an elf writing this. :) Thanks on all three counts, I appreciate the comments. NZ

Reviewer: Charli800 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26/11/08 - 09:09 am Title: Chapter 1

Wow, that was a lot of exclamation marks! I think your rhyme scheme was well done; it came across very naturally. I couldn't figure out the cadence though perhaps that was due to the exclamation marks. I'm not sure.

I have to query the inclusion of Elbereth as a high elf though - the Valar and the Elves are /very/ different.

To address spelling briefly:
Iluvatar (one l only)
Gilthoniel (You lost the first l. Gil is Sindarin for star; Gilthoniel means star hanger.

Despite my nitpicks I liked this: I think you have got the spirit of this poem right.

Happy writing,
Charli

Author's Response: Thanks for the spelling corrections - always appreciated. I'm sorry if the exclamation marks bothered you. This was one of my first attempts at (sarcasm) high poetry. I think what was going through my head was that the poem was praising the High Elves as well as what they praised. Thank you for the review, and have fun reading! NZ

Reviewer: Karlmir Stonewain Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/02/08 - 02:20 pm Title: Chapter 1

A beautiful ode to Three Graces of Arda.

Author's Response: You know, I was wondering if you'd notice this one. It was the first one I wrote, and it took me a while to get up the courage to post it online. 8-) NZ

Reviewer: oelberethgilthoniel Signed [Report This]
Date: 30/01/08 - 01:41 pm Title: Chapter 1

The last couple of lines seem kind of clunky, like they don't belong in the poem.

However, this sounds like something the Elves would write.

OEG

Author's Response: Thank you! NZ

Reviewer: xFanarix Signed [Report This]
Date: 22/11/07 - 07:39 pm Title: Chapter 1

I love this poem, it reads like it would sound beautiful set to harp music. [ My Maglor muse just told me, lol d;-) ]

Author's Response: That's a good idea

Reviewer: faramiriel Signed [Report This]
Date: 22/11/07 - 04:17 pm Title: Chapter 1

Beautiful!!!
you spelled Iluvatar wrong.
yay, you're finally posting!!! :D

Author's Response: Thanks for the spelling correction . . . I wasn't quite surernrnI was wondering when you get around to noticing it. . .

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