This is highly fascinating. I would encourage you to continue writing mysteries like this! You're almost as good as Arthur C. Doyle!
Author's Response: Wow, I'm flattered -- I'd love to write as entertainingly as he did. This was inspired by the Teitho challenge prompt "Whodunnit", and I bet you'd love the other stories written for it.
I enjoyed this very much. It has a real Rohirric/Anglo Saxon flavour about it. Do you know Beowulf as I loved your use of Beowulf type language?
Author's Response: Tragically, I really don't know Beowulf -- I guess I'd better read it before I see the movie. I mostly followed Tolkien's language in this story. One of the things I love about his writing is that he uses a different register of language for each culture, so the Rohirrim have a very distinct voice.
--…some towards THE crowd around the courier, others into the recesses of the hall.--
Add that THE in there.
--Theobrand of the Westfold is slain--
Later he is Theobald...misspelling.
--Elrohir had given him the beast already laden with the perverse name of Alqua--
Why does she have a Quenya name?
The horse info is great! Loved the story! Very well done.
Author's Response: Thanks for the corrections . . . I can't believe that I let the corpse change his name. I'm guessing that she has an elegant Quenya name because Elrohir is expressing his sense of humor.