Very fluffy! I didn't pick up any mistakes. It was surprisingly innocent - why was Primula so tired? I guess I was waiting for the who-pushed-who debate. Oh well, full marks for fluffiness.
True, but I love the way you have him caring for "mummy." Oh, and a question: Was the "Fauntling" supposed to be referring to a baby hobbit?
Author's Response: I believe that a 'fauntling' is a toddler hobbit, not an infant. Somebody correct me if I am wrong.