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Reviewer: Ria Signed [Report This]
Date: 15/08/07 - 02:56 pm Title: The Shadow of The Past

This seems like a huge improvement over "A Walk in Mirkwood." You wrote it carefully and have developed the characters and setting well. I would recommend that you get a human beta, however, because there are places where spellcheck is betraying you (for example, sometime and everyday instead of some time and every day, or awe and eve instead of aw and eave).

If you're worried about writing a Mary Sue, I'd recommend taking one of the on-line Sue tests, then changing any character qualities that make it score high.

Finally, do you want other authors to contribute to this story? Right now you have it posted as a round robin.

Good luck with the story!

Author's Response: Thank you for your Constructive Criticism!rnI will make the changes accordingly!rnIt was my first actual Fanficrn:DrnrnUm.rnWell a is that what a Round Robin for?rnim sorry im fairly new at all of this.

Reviewer: Susan Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/07/07 - 01:56 am Title: The Pearled jewel

Hi Isabeth,

This is just to let you know that I have removed the picture in your summary for this story, "An Elven Tale: The Fourth Age". Although the coding used in the site's layout allows for pictures to be included in summaries, we prefer it if members do not place images in summaries to make it easier for members with slow internet connections to browse the site. Please feel free, however, to include the picture within the body of your story.

All the best.

~Susan (admin)

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